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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.
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The broken line
grapth
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graph
 illustrates the
amount
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number
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 of tourists that a
specfic
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specific
 Caribbean
island
 had from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
, there
were
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was
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 an upward trend
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in
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of
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in
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 the number of visitors they had,
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and
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which
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and
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 the figure
shown
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is shown
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 who chose to stay on both
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the cruise
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cruise
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the cruise
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ship
 and
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the island
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island
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the island
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also
 had a climb. The total number of tourists had a significant growth,
form
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from
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 1
million
 in 2010 to 3.5
millions
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million
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 in 2017. Those who chose to stay on
island
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the island
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 had doubled from 0.75
million
 in 2010 to 1.5
million
 in 2017,
while
 those
stayed
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who stayed
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 on
ship
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the ship
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 even
jumpped
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jumped
 from 0.25
million
 in 2010 to eight times higher in 2017. Throughout the eight years, the
island
 used to have more visitors stayed on
island
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the island
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,
untill
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until
 2016,
where
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when
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who
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those who
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 stayed on
island
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the island
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 had a sudden drop of 0.25
million
.
Indead
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Indeed
Instead
, there was a jump in number from 0.75
million
 in 2011 to 1.5
million
 in 2013, and
remain
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remained
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 stable till a sudden
declined
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decline
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 in 2016 and
resummed
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resumed
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 in 2017. From 2016 onwards, more visitors chose to stay on
ship
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the ship
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 compared with
that
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those
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 who stayed on
island
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the island
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.
In
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From
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 2010 to 2012, the trend of
visitor
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visitors
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stayed
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staying
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 on cruise
ship
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ships
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fucturated
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fluctuated
, but
a
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apply
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rapid growth
was
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apply
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followed and reached 2
millions
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million
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 in 2017.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, ship, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 8 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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