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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given graph provides information about
a
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the
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 number of people residing in cities of
Phillipoiness
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Philippines
, Malaysia,
Thailand
 and Indonesia from the past to the forecasted future in
persentagewise
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percentage wise
.
Overall
, it can be seen in the graph that Malaysia has the highest number of nations inhabiting in modern cities the future as opposed to
Thailand
.
Moreover
, all states fluctuated over the given period of time.
At
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In
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 the
begining
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beginning
, the highest proportion of folks living in cities
is
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was
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 a bit over 30% can be seen in
Phillippines
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the Phillippines
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 which remained steady until 1980.
Subsequently
, it dramatically rose
at
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to
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 about 50% in 1990. Afterwards, Phillippines saw a slight fluctuation
untill
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until
 2040. Malaysia started at 30% in 1970 and
keeps
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will keep
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 an upward trend till 2040
according to
 predictions.
Thailand
 and Indonesia started at around 19% and 13% respectively in 1970. They encountered each other in 2000 at about 26%. After that, Indonesia rocketed,
while
Thailand
 will rocket after 2020. Both these countries will reach their peaks in 2040 with approximately 10% difference.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words thailand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rocketed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urban population
  • Trend analysis
  • Urbanization rate
  • Economic development
  • Rural-urban migration
  • Infrastructure
  • Socio-economic events
  • Stagnation
  • Anomalies
  • Environmental concerns
  • Predictive analysis
  • Geographical aspects
  • Government policies
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