All people should go to university, even if they are not going to use that education In their job. Do you agree or disagree?

firstly

, the academic skills that we gain at school are very helpful at work to ensure that failure being able to minimalized especially in high-risk jobs.

for instance

, working in the mining industrial sector is only for employees who graduate from mining or metallurgical engineering because

this

job is learned in the lecture.

however

, it does not mean ruling out the possibility of getting the job beyond the field.

thus

, going to university is the best way to improve our academic and hard skills in order to support our ability at work.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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