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You are organising a local committee meeting. You would like a local MP to attend the meeting to contribute to a discussion about green areas in the community. Write a letter of invitation to the MP's secretary, Mrs Shelton. In your letter -introduce your committee -say why you are having the meeting -invite the MP to attend

#committee #mp #discussion #areas #community #invitation #secretary #mrs #shelton #-introduce #-say #-invite
Dear Mrs. Shelton Greetings I hope
this
 letter finds you in good condition. I am writing to you regarding our
comitee
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committee
 meeting in order to
discussion
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discuss
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 about environment. First of all, let me introduce our
commision
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commission
, we
are
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 established
since
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in
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 2018 for
precisely
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precise
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 purposes. So we always encourage society to care about
environment
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the environment
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 surrounding them. Usually, we always hold many events
which
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apply
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related
in
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to
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green
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the green
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 movement
Secondly
,
in
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apply
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this
 month we will hold a meeting about green areas. It is irrefutable that
tree
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trees
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 or some plants
is
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are
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 essential for our hometown.
Hence
, we
decide
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 to
invide
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invite
invade
 society to
involve
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be involved
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 in
green
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the green
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 movement so that people are able to understand completely how
environment
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the environment
an environment
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 can influence their lives. For that reason, I would like to invite you as
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a speeker
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speeker
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speaker
in
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at
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 our events. Your experiences may become
inspiration
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an inspiration
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 for us Sincerely Yohanes
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Grammar & Spelling
Ensure to proofread your letter to correct small spelling or grammatical errors, such as 'discussion' instead of 'discuss' and 'comitee' instead of 'committee'.
Tone & Formality
Enhance the letter's formal tone by avoiding overly casual phrases and ensuring the use of complete and formally structured sentences.
Paragraph Structure
Consider introducing paragraphs with clear topic sentences to improve structure and flow. This aids in establishing a logical sequence of ideas.
Closing
Include a formal closing statement that reiterates the invitation and expresses anticipation for the recipient's response or attendance.
Content Relevance
The letter effectively introduces the committee and its purpose, highlighting the focus on green movements and environmental care.
Task Completion
The invitation to the MP to speak at the event is clear and positions the MP's experience as valuable, demonstrating an understanding of the task requirements.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • local committee
  • contribute
  • green areas
  • community development
  • sustainable practices
  • influence
  • presence
  • venue
  • confidential confirmation
  • dialogue
  • mission
  • vision
  • stewardship
  • environmental conservation
  • commitment
  • collaboration
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