Take a look at the graphic and complete the task. The graph shows the obesity rate in one country over a period of time.

Take a look at the graphic and complete the task.

The graph shows the obesity rate in one country over a period of time.
The line graph shows the
obesity
rate (by age) of one country between 1971-2005.
Overall
, adults between the ages of 45-64 were the most obese and 18-29-year-olds were the least,
rates
among the other age groups
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somewhere in between. All ages experienced a drastic increase in
obesity
rates
between 1976 and 1999. Between 1971 and 1976,
obesity
was fairly uncommon among all age groups, with
rates
ranging from about 8% to 18%.
However
, by 1999 the
prevelance
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prevalence
of
obesity
among 18-29-year-old adults rose up to 20%.
After
this
period
obesity
rates
among these young adults remained fairly stable, ending at 25% in 2005. With regards to, the prevalence of
obesity
among 30-44-year-olds, it rose from 15 to 30%, after which the rise slowed down and by the end of the period a little over 35% of them were obese. With respect
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to the percentage of obese people among 45-64-year-olds, by the end of 1999 over 35% of them were obese and by 2005 the number rose to 40%.
Obesity
rates
among 65-74-year-olds shared a similar figure,
however
by the end of the period only 35% were classified as obese.
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