Nowadays, animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and test the safety of other products. Many people argue that these should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favour of them as they bring many benefits to humanity. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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essay, I will discuss both views and give my opinion.
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Therefore
, they should be treated with humanity. For example
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from their parents or moved from their habitats is immoral.
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some think that using flora and fauna for medical research can be effective for people to bring up new pills, I believe that involving these creatures in inventions is unethical as they have feelings similar to humans.Submitted by prasadjul1986 on
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Ensure to provide clear and more specific examples to support your points. While the chimpanzee example is relevant, additional or more detailed evaluations could strengthen your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on diversifying your sentence structures to enhance readability and coherence. Use a mix of simple, compound, and complex sentences.
Task Achievement
While you addressed both views and your own opinion, making your thesis statement more explicit in the introduction could improve clarity.
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Pay attention to small grammatical and spelling errors to maintain high language accuracy.
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Consider expanding on the implications or consequences of each viewpoint to provide a more in-depth discussion.
Task Achievement
You have demonstrated a good grasp of the discussion format, presenting both sides of the argument before giving your own opinion.
Coherence and Cohesion
You have successfully used a range of vocabulary pertinent to the topic, which enriches your essay and engages the reader.