mineral fuels are the primary source of energy in many nations, but in some regions the use of renewable source of energy are encouraged

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period of time, mineral fuels are the primary
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of
energy
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in many nations, but in some
regions
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regions,
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the use of renewable
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source
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of
energy
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are
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encouraged. some of the
negatives
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effects of using mineral
fuel
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raising
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earth
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temperatures, in my
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it is a positive development as it contains many advantages factors like reducing pollution levels
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that it will boost the economy as it is cheap and abundant in nature without having no limitation like the
non renewable
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source
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pf
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energy
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. To embark on, green
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sources are
eco friendly
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limitless
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in nature as they are generated from air and sunshine, which are
clean
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and everlasting
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source
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of power which will
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contribute to a cleaner environment as it
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not
any
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harmful effects on the flora and fauna
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, usage of clean
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protect the environment as it can mitigate global warming by reducing hazardous emissions of
green house
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greenhouse
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gases
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the atmosphere which will
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directly lowers the global temperatures to a great extend as it reduces CO2 emissions, to exemplify, a recent article in DUBAIone magazine stated that the use of clean
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had an effect on the
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populations in the united Arab
emerits
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merits
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which increased by 4% since 1999 to 2023.
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, these are the advantageous side of using clean
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source
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of
energy
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. the impact of using nonrenewable
energy
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are
huge
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economical burden in many countries, from extracting to delivering
and
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apply
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processing and importing, to give an example, the cost of importing
fuel
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in Jordan is skyrocketing which the country
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use
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to generate electricity,
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furthermore
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the average Jordanian spending on
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are
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high and many live in poverty,
in
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addition
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high
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prices
increases
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almost every aspect of life,
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result
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many are struggling to start a business and the government cut spending on
devoloping
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developing
projects. in conclusion, I fully agree that the uses of clean
energy
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are safer
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the environment and must be encouraged globally as an alternative
source
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of power.

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Task Response
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Use of Examples
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Effective Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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