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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line chart provides
a key information
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key information
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 about the
percentage
 of
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apply
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the
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citizens in four cities Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia from 1970 to 2040. The data are
mesuard
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measured
 in
percentage
 of total people.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that Malaysia will have the highest
percentage
 by 2040.
In addition
,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 begin with the highest number of people living in
city
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the city
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,
whereas
 by 2040, will have the second lowest
per cent
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percentage
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 after Thailand. In terms of
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the philippines
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philippines
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Philippines
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, it starts with a
litile
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little
 above 30
percent
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per cent
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 and it
show
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shows
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 a
nosie
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noise
nose
 increasing
untill
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until
 it will
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be reached
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reached
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reaches
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approximtely
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approximately
 50 by 2040.
Moreover
, Malaysia
begin
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began
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 with
also
 30 per cent, and faced a significant
increasing
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increase
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 from 1970 to 2040. It reached almost 80
percent
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per cent
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.
According to
 what is shown, Thailand starts almost
one
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apply
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fifth
,
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 and faced
an
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a
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 notable
increasing
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increase
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. By 2040 will
reached
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reach
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one half
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one-half
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percentage
.
Lastly
, Indonesia
begin
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began
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 with the lowest number almost 15,
however
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however,
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 it showed a significant
raiseing
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rise
 until it reached 60 per cent.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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  • Urban population
  • Trend analysis
  • Urbanization rate
  • Economic development
  • Rural-urban migration
  • Infrastructure
  • Socio-economic events
  • Stagnation
  • Anomalies
  • Environmental concerns
  • Predictive analysis
  • Geographical aspects
  • Government policies
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