How important are urban green spaces for the environment and the well-being of city dwellers? Discuss the benefits and challenges of maintaining these spaces in growing cities.

Every city all over the world has
their
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green
spaces
and governments
understanding
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the importance of
such
places
develop
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and develop
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them.
That is
why let us understand is it really so important and beneficial for citizens. Personally, I found
this
question highly important because the key factor for the length of living and just for the well-being of citizens is our environment. It is especially relevant for big cities where
people
come across endless traffic jams, air pollution and other megapolis problems.
That is
why creating green parks, alleys and just small yards makes
people’a
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people’s
lives better because of the tether of harmful
emission
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and air pollution.
However
, there are a lot of problems with urbanization and population growth
accordingly
. It is necessary to build new houses for
people
because previous ones are not so comfortable and spacious.
That is
why
government
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and developers
also
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not only destroy old houses
,
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but
also
build new
in
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green
spaces
just because there are no more free
spaces
. On the one hand government
understand
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the importance of
the
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green environment and
also
they understand that migrants need to live somewhere. The
economical
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growth is closely related
with
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scarcity
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the scarcity
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of free living
spaces
, so
people
start prioritizing
real
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the real
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estate market above the health of
people
. All in all, we cannot say that governments make a mistake
providing
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in providing
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available living
spaces
because they try to balance
people
’s needs
creating
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green areas
also
. Hopefully, Moscow have a lot of green
spaces
and it is not the biggest problem of the city.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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