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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.
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"The given two pie charts provide data on the comparison of five different types of
energy
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 generated in France from 1995 to 2005.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the two charts show a similar trend in both years. It is
also
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 worth noting that gas comprises the largest portion throughout the given period. Looking at the charts in more detail, in 1995, coal was the largest
energy
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 source at 29.80%, followed by gas, petrol, nuclear, and other
energy
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 production.
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, the percentage for coal increased slightly by around 1% from 29.80% in 1995 to 30.93% in 2005, making it the predominant source of
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 production in 2005. Gas accounted for the second-largest portion in both years, with figures of 29.63% in 1995 and 30.31% in 2005.
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, despite petrol accounting for 29.27% in 1995, its figure decreased by around 10% to 19.55% in 2005.
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, nuclear
energy
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 constituted 6.40% of the
energy
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 generated in 1995 and showed a rising trend to 10.10% in 2005. The other
energy
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 production sector
also
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 experienced a gradual increase of around 5%, rising from 4.90% to 9.10%."
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally, also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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