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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to English

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Since there is an Increasing
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number of tourists
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the
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global
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,
English
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 has become the top spoken
language
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. Some believe that all nations should speak
English
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 as
world’s
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language
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, there are benefits and drawbacks.
This
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Firstly
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, the positive effects
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 using only
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 include improvement in global connections and simplification of education. if all nations use the same
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,
this
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 makes people understand each other effectively without
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, resulting they can develop better relationships.
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, If schools
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 to teach students only
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, it will facilitate not only their learning but
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acquiring
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 more information even
it
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 is not written in
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, in science, there are numerous studies
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done in
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 and it is sometimes difficult to obtain their fascinating research from overseas
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barries
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.
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, if
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 was the only
language
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, there
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 no requirement
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 obtain valuable information
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 the world.
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, there are
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language
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such
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 as
its
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 risk of losing
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 of
different
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 culture. The origins of various literature often explain their variable old story behind and conserving the uniqueness of different languages means
also
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respect
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 their cultural differences.
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, wabi-sabi is one of the famous phrases in Japan and it is not easily translated to another foreign word. It is difficult to explain in
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 words can exactly express
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,
its
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 beauty of the sound represents our unique culture.
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, limiting to one
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in
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the
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global
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 can demolish other
countries
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countries'
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 own
value
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. In conclusion, having one common
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 among
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all countries can give some advantages in bonding global
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relationships
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 and making
easier
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it easier
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 to learn,
however
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, there are some demerits which include a risk of losing cultural respect.

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coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, make sure to organize your ideas in a clear, logical manner. Use a range of linking words effectively to connect ideas within and across paragraphs.
task achievement
For task response, ensure that you fully address all parts of the task. Develop your ideas fully and provide specific examples to support your arguments.
task achievement
You've done an excellent job in presenting a balanced view by considering both the advantages and disadvantages of the topic.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are both effectively structured, providing a clear overview and summarization of your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Prominent
  • Contribute
  • Global
  • Advantages
  • Disadvantages
  • Communication
  • Understanding
  • Ease
  • Business
  • Trade
  • Cultural exchange
  • Unity
  • Access
  • Information
  • Simplify
  • Travel
  • Tourism
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