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The chart below shows the percentage of men and women who did various free-time activities in England in 2006

The chart below shows the percentage of men and women who did various free-time activities in England in 2006
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The bar chart compares the number of different leisure time activities for males and females in England in 2016.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
men
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 preferred watching TV and spending time with family,
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the
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most
of
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women
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 percentage spent on doing sports and reading.
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 with
men
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 in 2006 spent just over 75 percent of their time watching TV and being with family at the same level,
according to
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 the
women
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 they spent 80% and 70% respectively. The population of
men
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 who make purchases was less than 70 per
cent
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,
however
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,
women
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 comprise 30 per
cent
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. 65 per
cent
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 of
men
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 went in for sports and
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 read books, but a slightly larger number of
women
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 went in for sports, which was 75 per
cent
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, and only 70 per
cent
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 read books.
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, the group of males who were interested in using the internet was approximately 43
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,
whereas
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 the opposite gender had a higher percentage around 68.
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, only 5% of
men
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 were in the playing computer games group compared to 10% of
women
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.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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