The chart below gives information about the percentage of male and female teacher in six different kind of education setting in UK in 2010.

The chart below gives information about the percentage of male and female teacher in six different kind of education setting in UK in 2010.
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The chart displays data about teachers in the United Kingdom based on their educational setup in the year 2010. Upon first glance,
it is clear that
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the female
workforce
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is larger than the male
workforce
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, in general. There are very few male teachers in the primary and pre-school
levels
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with female teachers dominating these
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with nearly 100%
population
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.
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, at secondary school
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, male
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nearly close the gap to female
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. The female
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only lead by a small margin
while
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at the college level, there is an equal ratio of male to female
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. At the college level, both male and female
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occupy about 50% of the
workforce
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.
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, there is a contrast in the
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population
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in private training institutes and university
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, where male faculty are seen in higher populations. Especially at the university level, the male faculty exceeds the female
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by more than 20% with over 60% of the
population
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being male.
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