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The line graph shows the changes in the number of overseas tourists in three different regions (coast, lakes, and mountains) in each country in Europe. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the changes in the number of overseas tourists in three different regions (coast, lakes, and mountains) in each country in Europe. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates how the overseas
tourists
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 in three different regions which are
coast
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the coast
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, lakes, and mountains in every European country
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 from 1987 to 2007. Units are measured in thousands.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of foreign
visitors
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 increased throughout the given period
although
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 there are some places
faced
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that faced
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 a fluctuation. It can clearly be seen that the coast is
area
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an area
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 which witnessed
a
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the
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 largest overseas
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tourists
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tourist
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 numbers, compared with the other two
area
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areas
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. In terms of the place with the highest level of foreign
tourists
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, the coast's
visitors
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number
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 started at exactly 40. In the following years, the
number
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 slightly decreased to about 35.
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, the
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visitors
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number of visitors
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 had a dramatic growth and
reach
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reached
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 it is
highest
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the highest
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 level at approximately 75 in 2007. Regarding the other two areas, the overseas
tourists
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 of the mountains and the lakes stood at precisely 20 and 10, respectively. The growing
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visitors
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number of visitors
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intersect
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 at around 25 in 1992. From
this
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 point onwards, the lakes'
visitors
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 increased to 40 and soared to roughly 75 in 2002.
Then
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, the
number
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 hit a through at 50 in 2007.
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, the mountains'
tourists
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number
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 remained stable at 30 between 1997 and 2002.
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, the
number
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 experienced a little growth by around 5 in the
last
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 period of time.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, number, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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