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The line graph shows the changes in the number of overseas tourists in three different regions (coast, lakes, and mountains) in each country in Europe. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the changes in the number of overseas tourists in three different regions (coast, lakes, and mountains) in each country in Europe. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates how the overseas
tourists
 in three different regions which are
coast
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the coast
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, lakes, and mountains in every European country
evolve
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evolved
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 from 1987 to 2007. Units are measured in thousands.
Overall
, the
number
 of foreign
visitors
 increased throughout the given period
although
 there are some places
faced
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that faced
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 a fluctuation. It can clearly be seen that the coast is
area
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an area
the area
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 which witnessed
a
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the
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 largest overseas
tourists
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tourist
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 numbers, compared with the other two
area
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areas
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. In terms of the place with the highest level of foreign
tourists
, the coast's
visitors
number
 started at exactly 40. In the following years, the
number
 slightly decreased to about 35.
Thereafter
, the
visitors
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number of visitors
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 had a dramatic growth and
reach
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reached
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 it is
highest
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the highest
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 level at approximately 75 in 2007. Regarding the other two areas, the overseas
tourists
 of the mountains and the lakes stood at precisely 20 and 10, respectively. The growing
visitors
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number of visitors
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intersect
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intersected
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 at around 25 in 1992. From
this
 point onwards, the lakes'
visitors
 increased to 40 and soared to roughly 75 in 2002.
Then
, the
number
 hit a through at 50 in 2007.
In contrast
, the mountains'
tourists
number
 remained stable at 30 between 1997 and 2002.
Then
, the
number
 experienced a little growth by around 5 in the
last
 period of time.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, number, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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