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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates that people who are not working how to spend their time
last
 year in
UK
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the UK
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. It can be seen that
women
 and men
categorized
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are categorized
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by
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into
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 two
type
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types
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 which are morning and afternoon
also
 there are 14 options
what
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for what
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 they choose to do.
Overall
,
proportion
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the proportion
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 of housework
at
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is at
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 the top of the list
in
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for
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 both
gender
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genders
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however
rate
 of drinking had
lowest
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the lowest
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 mark on the table.
Moreover
, both
gender
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genders
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 more likely to do shopping in the morning.
In addition
, the
rate
 of housework in the morning
women
 category
significantly
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is significantly
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 high with 49;
on the other hand
,
percentage
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the percentage
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 of playing
sport
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sports
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 and staying in bed for
women
 in the afternoon has no
marked
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marks
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 so
they
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they are
they were
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 not interested in these activities.
While
the
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apply
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most men prefer to do job hunting the
rate
 with 22 in the morning, they not
spent
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spend
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 their time staying in bed in the afternoon so
with
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for
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this
 reason
rate
 of
this
 activity
has
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is
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 just 1. In conclusion, it can be observed that there are many activities people
spent
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spend
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 spare their time
when
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on when
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 they
not
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do not
did not
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 have a job
also
 there are some differences between the
rate
 of men and
women
 who choose what to do.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, rate with synonyms.
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