It is clear from the graph that the ratio of smoking men were the highest over the period given, while the women were the lowest in general.
The line chart illustrates the rates of smoking between
males
and Use synonyms
females
in some land from 1960 to 2000.
It is noticeable that women have a lower Use synonyms
rate
than men in all years. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, the Linking Words
rate
of smoking by men has decreasing all the years.
In 1960, the number of smokers had different starting points, which was close to 100,000 for Use synonyms
females
and 600,000 for Use synonyms
males
. Use synonyms
In addition
, the Linking Words
rate
of smoking in Someland fell to 500,000 Use synonyms
Use synonyms
males
inhabitants in 1975. Change the noun form
male
Moreover
, the value of smoking was highest dropped approximately to 295,000 Linking Words
males
during the period 1975 to 1995. Use synonyms
Then
, the number of Linking Words
rate
smoking Use synonyms
by
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apply
males
slightly decreased to 250,000 Use synonyms
males
in a half-decade.
In terms of the Use synonyms
rate
of smoking in some land by women, the amount of smoking Use synonyms
rate
rose to 310,000 Use synonyms
females
population from 1960 to 1975 and the smoking Use synonyms
rate
was constant at 310,000 Use synonyms
females
from 1975 to 1980 but the amount slightly decreased to 300,000 Use synonyms
females
in 1985. After that, the number of Use synonyms
females
rates declined year by year, which was approximately 290,000, 210,000, and 200,000 Use synonyms
females
in 1990,1995, and 2000, respectively.Use synonyms
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