It is clear from the graph that the ratio of smoking men were the highest over the period given, while the women were the lowest in general.
The illustration above shows the
overall
comparison on
the Change preposition
of
rates
of smoking between men and women in a region known as Someland, from the timespan ranging from 1960 to 2000.
Firstly
, the most noticeable feature of the two lines present
a decreasing Change the verb form
presents
rates
of smoking for men Fix the agreement mistake
rate
overtime
. Correct your spelling
over time
While
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In
in contrast
, there is an
temporary rise in Change the article
a
rates
of smoking from 60's
to mid Fix apostrophe usage
'60s
70's
which Fix apostrophe usage
'70s
subsequently
follows in
a steady decline in the remaining period until 90's Change preposition
apply
arrives
giving a Wrong verb form
arrived
more
fall in trend,
Correct quantifier usage
apply
Accordingly
, another thing that can be seen is the general difference in the propensity of smoking among the two genders , men smoke comparatively much more than women but the rates
even out in a parallel fashion out
in later years.Change preposition
apply
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