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You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is a college that you have not been to before. Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter: – give details of your course and your arrival/departure date – explain your accommodation needs – ask for information about getting to and from the college

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Dear Sir or Madam,
This
 letter finds you well. My full name is Jack Jhonson. The reason why I am writing is that I am going on a short course to a training college abroad. I have been learning history for two years and I want to go abroad for my studies. I will stay there for two or three weeks.
Therefore
, I need a flat and I hope you understand me. I want my home's size normal and have a couple of chairs, a bedroom and other furniture. Whenever I arrive at my accommodation, it has to be clean and convenient. I think you try to find a house for me. It is my first travel to abroad.
Therefore
, I do not know how to go to university and how to live there. I hope you can provide several information about it. I look forward to your reply and a resolution to my problem. Yours faithfully, Jack
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Task Achievement
Try to provide specific dates for your arrival and departure to help the accommodation officer understand your needs better.
Task Achievement
Mention the exact course name and the college to make your letter more informative.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use paragraphs to organize your letter more clearly, grouping related information together for better coherence.
Coherence and Cohesion
Check for small grammatical errors and try to use a range of sentence structures to enhance your writing.
Task Achievement
Clearly stated the main purpose of the letter.
Coherence and Cohesion
Used polite and appropriate language for the context of the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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