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Band 2

Improvements in health, education and trend are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibilities for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Introduction
it is argued that
devoloped
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developed
 in health , education and
trend
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trends
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are
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ara
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are
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the
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poor
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countries
counries
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countries
,
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nevertheless
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nevertheless
, the
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governments
goverments
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governments
 of
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nation
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Nations
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 should take
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responsibility
responsibilities
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responsibility
 for helping the poor one , I disagree with
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due to
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 the the
corupution
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corruption
 of poor countries ,
Body paragraph 1
first of all , it is known whatever money they will have, the
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situation
 never
change
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 because they are corrupt
people
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 , they do not care about
thier
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their
people
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 and the
countey
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country
it self
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itself
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moreover
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 all
money
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 they will have
it
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will be for them and
there
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their
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 children.
Body paragraph 2
second of all , there
is
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people
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think
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who think
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 if the rich
counrues
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countries
 the
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people
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 life will change and they will be happy
people
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 and
better
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a better
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 life for them and I think if something
change
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 I will be with them .
Conclusion
in conculation, there
is
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a
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some
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people
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think
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who think
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 there is no point
of
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 giving to the poor country
helo
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help
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 and there
is
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are
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people
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think
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better
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 to
helo
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help
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 them .

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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