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The table below gives information about a restaurant’s average sales in three different branches in 2016.

The table below gives information about a restaurant’s average sales in three different branches in 2016.
#information #restaurant’s #sales #three #branches
The presented table provides information on the rate of transactions among three streets ,which
has
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its
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their
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 own famous
item
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items
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(chicken
burger
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burgers
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,wings and pasta)in the time period of 2016. As
its
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it is
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 crystal clear,the highest sale
was
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belonged to Georgia and Dunsmuir
street
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Street
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 which was 854,750 respectively ,
while
 the the
least
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last
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one was for Drake(390). To commence with the transaction value,the most burger sales
goes
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 for Georgia
street
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Street
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 which was 10.69 ,
whereas
 ,chicken pasta was
9.02$in
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9.02$ in
drake
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Drake
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 and chicken wings
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were 5.61$in
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5.61$in
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5.61$ in
 Dunsmuir. Not only the value
,
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apply
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but
also
 other options was in a similar fashion
such
 as
eat in
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transaction
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the transaction
a transaction
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 and take away both was high (405,449) in Georgia ,
furtheremore
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furthermore
this
 was similar for
dunsmuir
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Dunsmuir
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 358 and 392,
hence
 ,the least one goes to drake street.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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