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Two maps show an Island, and changes that take place after construction of tourist facilities.

Two maps show an Island, and changes that take place after construction of tourist facilities.
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Two diagrams illustrate the comparison of the
island
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 between before and after
of
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apply
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the
construction
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 of facilities.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
construction
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 created a number of houses and facilities that could attract potential tourists. It built a lot of
house
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houses
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 for accommodation, and
also
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transportation
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a transportation
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 system to reach the
island
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. Before the
construction
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, there were
forest
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forests
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in
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on
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 the western and eastern
side
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sides
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 of the
island
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, and it seems that
eastern
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the eastern
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forest
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forests
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 are larger than
western
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the western
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.
Also
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, the
island
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 was surrounded by sea and a beach was located in the westernmost part of the
island
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.
On the other hand
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, after the
construction
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, the
island
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 was totally changed. The most noticeable change was in infrastructure. In the southern part of the
island
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, a pier
was build
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was built
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 and it plays
a
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an
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 important role
to
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in
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 parking ships.
Furthermore
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, in the middle of the
island
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,
reception
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a reception
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 house was constructed and it connects with the pier and a restaurant via
vehicle
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a vehicle
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 track.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, construction with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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