More eveldoping countries are being given aid by international organizations to help them in their development plans. Some people argue that financial aid is important but others suggest that practical aid and advice are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, people who
lived
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in developing countries begin to help others in different ways. Those countries provide
supports
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support
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to
development
plans through international organizations.The most common ways is directly giving others
by
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apply
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financial aid or
provide
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providing
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practical advice. Both solutions
benefits
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a lot, personally, I tend to offer realistic
supports
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support
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. Financial support is the most convenient
way
to
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other individuals. With
this
support, the organization can easily use the budget to improve certain
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plans
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which is
n
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in
progress.
However
, it has its advantages and disadvantages, the funder
have
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no idea whether the fund is using properly. There is a chance that
the
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big
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amount of money might
be invest
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in
other place
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another place
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.
For example
, news often reports that some politicians
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from
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government
development
plans, which
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intended to enhance the living standards of residences,
such
as
built
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building
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a society apartment or a
transpotation
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transportation
system.
While
practical
assistances
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assistance
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does not have
such
question
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questions
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like
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financial support, certain items can only
use
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in the
development
plans,
such
as material or food.
Therefore
, more and more people prefer to give their hand in
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way
, in order to avoid graft in abundant cash flows.
Whereas
, the only problem in
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provide
certain
stuffs
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stuff
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is the highly
repeatition
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repetition
of same products, which leads to the shortcuts of necessary demands.
For instance
, people might need rice
instead
of clothes,
however
, others keep
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clothes or shoes. In
this
way
, those
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behaviors can not
make
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any
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help. In conclusion,
no matter is
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financial aid or practical aid all
brings
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bring
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in great results in
development
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developing
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countries. As long as the provider
willing
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is willing
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to give help, both
way
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ways
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are good ways.
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Task Achievement
Make sure to fully address both views of the argument before presenting your own opinion. Your essay mentions both financial and practical aid but could delve deeper into the argument for each side.
Coherence & Cohesion
Try to organize your essay with clear introductions, body paragraphs, and conclusions. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea that is expanded upon with explanations or examples.
Task Achievement
Avoid general statements and strive to provide specific examples to support your arguments. This makes your essay more persuasive and demonstrates a deeper understanding of the topic.
General
Be mindful of grammar and punctuation to ensure clarity and professionalism in your writing. Consider revising sentences that might confuse the reader or disrupt the flow of your essay.
Task Achievement
You’ve presented a clear stance on preferring practical aid, which is good for fulfilling the task requirement.
Coherence & Cohesion
You’ve made an effort to compare and contrast different types of aid, which is essential for discussing both views.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable development
  • infrastructure
  • capacity building
  • technology transfer
  • corruption
  • efficiently
  • dependency
  • holistic development
  • immediate needs
  • empower
  • sustainability
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