More eveldoping countries are being given aid by international organizations to help them in their development plans. Some people argue that financial aid is important but others suggest that practical aid and advice are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Nowadays, people who
lived
in developing countries begin to help others in different ways. Those countries provide Wrong verb form
live
supports
to Fix the agreement mistake
support
development
plans through international organizations.The most common ways is directly giving others by
financial aid or Change preposition
apply
provide
practical advice. Both solutions Wrong verb form
providing
benefits
a lot, personally, I tend to offer realistic Change the verb form
benefit
supports
.
Financial support is the most convenient Fix the agreement mistake
support
way
to helping
other individuals. With Wrong verb form
help
this
support, the organization can easily use the budget to improve certain plan
which is Fix the agreement mistake
plans
n
progress. Correct your spelling
in
However
, it has its advantages and disadvantages, the funder have
no idea whether the fund is using properly. There is a chance that Change the verb form
has
the
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a
big
amount of money might Correct word choice
large
be invest
in Change the verb form
be investing
be invested
other place
. Change the wording
another place
other places
For example
, news often reports that some politicians bribery
Replace the word
bribe
from
government Change preposition
for
development
plans, which was
intended to enhance the living standards of residences, Correct subject-verb agreement
were
such
as built
a society apartment or a Change the form of the verb
building
transpotation
system.
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transportation
While
practical assistances
does not have Fix the agreement mistake
assistance
such
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questions
like
financial support, certain items can only Change preposition
as
use
in the Wrong verb form
be used
development
plans, such
as material or food. Therefore
, more and more people prefer to give their hand in realistic
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a realistic
way
, in order to avoid graft in abundant cash flows. Whereas
, the only problem in porvide
certain Correct your spelling
provide
stuffs
is the highly Change the wording
stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
repeatition
of same products, which leads to the shortcuts of necessary demands. Correct your spelling
repetition
For instance
, people might need rice instead
of clothes, however
, others keep donate
clothes or shoes. In Wrong verb form
donating
this
way
, those kindness
behaviors can not Replace the word
kinds of
make
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apply
any
help.
In conclusion, Correct quantifier usage
apply
no matter is
financial aid or practical aid all Verb problem
whether
brings
in great results in Correct subject-verb agreement
bring
development
countries. As long as the provider Replace the word
developing
willing
to give help, both Add a missing verb
is willing
way
are good ways.Fix the agreement mistake
ways
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Task Achievement
Make sure to fully address both views of the argument before presenting your own opinion. Your essay mentions both financial and practical aid but could delve deeper into the argument for each side.
Coherence & Cohesion
Try to organize your essay with clear introductions, body paragraphs, and conclusions. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea that is expanded upon with explanations or examples.
Task Achievement
Avoid general statements and strive to provide specific examples to support your arguments. This makes your essay more persuasive and demonstrates a deeper understanding of the topic.
General
Be mindful of grammar and punctuation to ensure clarity and professionalism in your writing. Consider revising sentences that might confuse the reader or disrupt the flow of your essay.
Task Achievement
You’ve presented a clear stance on preferring practical aid, which is good for fulfilling the task requirement.
Coherence & Cohesion
You’ve made an effort to compare and contrast different types of aid, which is essential for discussing both views.