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You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is a college that you have not been to before. Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter, •give details of your course and your arrival/departure date •explain your accommodation needs •ask for information about getting to and from the college

#course #college #accommodation #officer #•give #departure #date #•explain #•ask #information
Dear Sir or Madam My full name is Turabov Shahzod. I am writing
this
 letter. I am going on a short course to a training college abroad.
This
 college's name is WESTMINSTER.
Firstly
, I will go on 5th September. And I will be there for 2 weeks. I am going to stay until 19th September I will depart on 19th September.
Secondly
, I want two comfortable modern rooms. And I always have to drink coffee everyday evening.It needs to be a little bit new and it has a desk and a chair and 5G wi-fi.
Thirdly
, I do not know. How can I go to the at there ? Can you tell for information about getting to and from the college? Because I will never be
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there.I will wait for your answer. Yours faithfully Shahzad
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structure
Try to use paragraphs more effectively to separate different ideas and requests.
grammar
Ensure to use appropriate and varied sentence structures to increase the clarity and quality of your letter.
tone
Keep your tone polite and formal throughout the letter to match the context of writing to an official or a formal recipient.
accuracy
Check your letter for errors and aim for accuracy in grammar and usage of prepositions.
task achievement
You have clearly stated the purpose of your letter, your course details, and your accommodation needs, which is great for task achievement.
language use
Your closing is polite and appropriate, showing a good use of formal language in that part.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation officer
  • short course
  • training college
  • abroad
  • arrival date
  • departure date
  • private room
  • dietary needs
  • transportation options
  • reach
  • airport
  • train station
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