The plans below shot the site of an airport and how it will look after redevelopments next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The plans display the airport's current
features
and redevelopment
features
for next year. ,
Firstly
, before the redevelopment
, there are 8 gates for entering the plane and there is one door for departures and arrivals. In the airport, there is a cafe
and check departure platform and in the gate part, there is a walkway platform after redevelopment
, they will increase the gates number to 18 and they will add new features
such
as bag
drop
, ATM, car
hire, and shops. Shops will be between the gates and the security passport control, bag
drop
will be in the left corner in the departure section instead
of the cafe
and cafe
will be left bottom edge and check-in will be opposite side of the bag
drop
. In the arrival division, there is an ATM between the cafe
and car
hire , the car
hire will be in the right bottom corner and the cafe
will be on the right top edge. They will replace the walkway with a sky train.
In conclusion, the cafe
and the check-in features
will not change after the redevelopment
but will change their location. Also
, they will add more features
to the airport like an ATM, bag
drop
, car
hire and an additional cafe
to the arrival section.Submitted by atakantemizkan0 on
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Overall Improvement
You've highlighted the main changes effectively, showing a clear understanding of the task. To enhance your essay, try to vary your sentence structures and use a wider range of vocabulary to describe the changes more vividly.
Coherence and Cohesion
Consider using more precise connectors to make the progression of your description smoother. This will help in making your essay even more cohesive.
Task Achievement
Ensure clarity when describing the location of features in the airport; using directions (e.g., 'northwest corner') could make your descriptions more precise and easier to follow. This can add to the effectiveness of your task achievement.
Task Achievement
Your summary effectively captures the main changes planned for the airport redevelopment, indicating a good understanding of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion
You've successfully contrasted the current state with the future redevelopment plans, making relevant comparisons where necessary.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
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