Too much empasis placed on testing these days. The need to prepare for tests and examination is a restriction on teachers and also exerts unnecessary pressure on young learners. To what extent to you agree or disagree?

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that examination is
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on both teachers and
students
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the benefits of
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, but I do believe there are
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amount of drawbacks, and I will be
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issue provided with my own opinion below. On the one hand, it is hard for
students
to understand the
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importance
of
education
, so it is not likely to create a
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they study spontaneously. The testing itself serves as
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intimidation to ensure
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learn properly.
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students
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all subjects, not only the ones they are interested in. A comprehensive range of
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society build well-rounded individuals.
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the tests can
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opportunity
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stress tolerance in a controlled environment.
However
, the testings are
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nowadays. it comes to the extent
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students
are overwhelmed by the excessive loads in preparing
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and the fear of failing exams.
Also
,
students
can develop a distorted view by
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determining
self-value based on
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results. Other than that, the process of testing is time-consuming. Not only the
students
are spending plenty of
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reviewing materials, but
also
the educators are dedicating
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for
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organizing testing
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.
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may
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limit the time for offering other
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and teachings in more flexible ways. In my opinion, It is important to acknowledge the role tests play in the
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and to not
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on it.
Examinationa
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to improve the
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efficiency
of learning, and
students
can
also
be trained to equip with stress
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abilities through the process. On the other side, testing nowadays
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been given too much
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, and is creating drawbacks. Teachers and
students
are wasting pointless
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on preparing and
this
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the
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for more valuable teachings.
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