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The line graph provides us with information about number of books that were rented from various libraries from june to september 2014 while the pie chart presents percentage of borrowed books' genre.

The line graph provides us with information about number of books that were rented from various libraries from june to september 2014 while the pie chart presents percentage of borrowed books' genre.
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The provided line graph shows the
number
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 of
books
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 borrowed from many libraries from
June
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 to
September
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 2014. Meanwhile, the pie chart describes the types of
books
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 which were borrowed.
Overall
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, the trends of
number
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 of
books
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 borrowed from each library were different.
In addition
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, figures ranged from 50
books
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 to 300
books
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.
Moreover
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, the total
number
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 of
books
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 from all libraries was categorised into six genres.
First,
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the
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 of
books
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 borrowed from Ryeslip was on a downward trend. It dramatically decreased from 300
books
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 in
June
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 to 160
books
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 in
September
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.
In addition
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, the figure of Sutton Wood fluctuated during the period. It climbed up from 250
books
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 in
June
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 to 275
books
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 in July and
then
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 went down to 100
books
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 in August. After that, it jumped up to 300
books
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 in
September
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.
Furthermore
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, the amount of West Eaton and Church Mount rose from 50
books
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 in
June
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 to 150
books
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 in
September
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. They were on an upward trend. As can be seen from the pie chart, fiction was the biggest portion at 43% followed by biography at 19%. Science and history contributed at the same rate which was 14%.
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, self-help was at the bottom position. It occupied 10% of all genres.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, books, june, september with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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