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Students should pay the full cot for thier own study, because university education benefits individuals rather than society. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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It is said that
students
 should budget the full price for their own education as studying in universities has a greater benefit for individuals than society.
This
 writer disagrees with
this
 statement
due to
 the fact that knowledge from
university
 is not used in the workplace very much, and education at
university
 is like a frame
that is
 not practical. It is evident that what
students
 learn at
university
 is not used in the working environment. It is sometimes said that 60% of knowledge from school is useless in the workplace like the literature is not used much in engineering.
As a result
, it makes graduated
students
 have to study more in a specific area in order to have a job and that shows the money they paid for
university
 is worthless. Another factor that makes me disagree with the statement is the way
universities
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students
 are taught in a mechanical manner. It is true that many teachers use the old approach that lets learners study by heart and get high scores on exams.
Consequently
, the creativity and innovation of
students
 is limited and that leads to incomplete development for
students
 which is really helpful later in life.
For instance
, people with more practical experience in their field are more likely to be accepted to the dream occupation rather than those who do not. In conclusion,
students
 should not pay the
overall
 cost for their own education because there is not much we learn
is
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 used in daily life and unpractical methods are given to the learners.
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