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The table below the results of a survey on workplace complaints in Germany in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below the results of a survey on workplace complaints in Germany in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table shows
responses
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 of workers about their workplace
complaints
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 in Germany in 2001. It is
ease
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 to observe that
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most
men
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 reported
annyowing
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annoying
 co-workers as
complaints
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 in their office with a figure of 34%.
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relationship
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 with the line manager and excessive noise. Those numbers are 22% and 20%, respectively. Unlike
men
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, only 9% of
women
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 reported annoying co-workers for their
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 and 7% for
relationship
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relationships
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 with their managers.
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 the chart, it is obvious that both
men
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 and
women
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 have
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complaints
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 about excessive noise, which
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 23.0%. One
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noticeable
 factor is that lack of privacy and technical support are the most reported responses among
women
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. Both accounted for the majority of
women
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’s
response
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 (21% and 16% respectively).
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, those categories are not serious problems for
men
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. They only reported 9% and 3% each.
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, It is obvious that sexual harassment is
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 a considerable matter, but
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 is only for
women
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. 10% of
women
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 reported about
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while
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 1% of
men
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 did.
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, temperature is the most minor
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complaints
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complaint
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 for both of them.
Overall
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,
it Is clear that
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men
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 have
complaints
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 related to
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their relationship
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relationship
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relationships
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 with
ther collegues
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their colleagues
whereas
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women
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 consider more about their external environment at their workplace.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words complaints, men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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