You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below shows how cheese is made. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The diagram below shows how cheese is made.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
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This
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pictures
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illustrates the process of
cheese
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made from the Acidification
the
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of the
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milk until selling it in the shops.
Overall
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,
according to
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what is shown we can notice that it takes more than 2 months.
Firstly
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, acidification
it
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apply
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is
to mix
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mixing
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the raw milk with
and
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bacteria in
steel
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a steel
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jar under pressure and high temperature.
Secondly
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, the
cheese
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take
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takes
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a cube shape (Curds) and
this
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process
nemed
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named
need
is Solidification.
Then
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cheese
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cut
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is cut
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into small pieces and
return
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returned
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to heating and draining.
While
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, heating
and
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apply
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before the
cheese
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back
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is back
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to
soild
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solid
sold
it
mixed
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is mixed
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with salt.
Then
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, give it the shape and
this
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process
named
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is named
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by (Shaping). After, the seventh step, which,
it
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apply
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is the longest step
it
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takes two
moths
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months
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.
Lastly
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, Packaging
this
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step is different because it
it
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is
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up to the company that packaging it.
Then
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, it came to shops or supermarkets.
To sum
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up
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up,
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everything has been
steted
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stated
tested
so far,
cheese
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is made from raw milk and in 9 steps the
cheese
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will
in
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be in
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our
hand
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hands
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cheese with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • cheese production
  • raw milk
  • pasteurization
  • harmful bacteria
  • rennet
  • starter cultures
  • coagulation
  • curds
  • whey
  • heating
  • pressing
  • molding
  • aging
  • salt
  • packaging
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