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Band 6

Many people go through life doing work that they hate or have no talent for. Why does this happen? What are the consequences of this situation?

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 that a number of individuals working in the field are not interested in or even love for over a
life
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. There could be two main reasons. The first
reason
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 could be the financial priority and security of some workers and the other
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 might some
people
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 could not find their dream job.
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 issue. On the one hand, some
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work
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 different
jobs
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 not match their qualifications or are even ambitious to seek financial security. They may think having more money is much better than working in
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 with a lesser outcome that could not help with the living expenses and even cannot afford to have the best quality of
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, some
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 get a degree, but
work
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 in
jobs
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 not related to their career and when asked about the
reason
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 they may respond that they have not had a better income since leaving the
work
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 they adore. Even though, that could lead to disappointment for some
people
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 who spent years studying hard, dreaming of having the best
jobs
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 that can provide them excellent pay and suddenly find out the outcome is not enough to cover all their expenses. Sometimes
people
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 need the best for their
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 even not the best option for them. The other
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 is some
people
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 might try their best to have their interested job, but may not achieve the
work
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 requirements. Many
jobs
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 could have some specific categories of conditions to get
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 as some require at least 15 years experience in some area and need to be professional in some skills that may not require a degree.
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 may cause anxiety for
people
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 who have a high degree certificate, and give them concern about the future, so working in something they do not like can decrease the stress and help them through
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, some
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 need to find the best
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performance in
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 and do not pay attention to what type of
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 they love or
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. In my opinion,
people
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 need to enjoy any
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 they do even is not suitable and try to learn more about
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could help them in
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 to love what they are doing even if it
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 not their dream.

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Expression Clarity
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Sentence Structure
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Grammar
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Detailing Examples
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Task Understanding
Your essay effectively outlines the reasons behind and consequences of people engaging in work they do not enjoy, demonstrating a good understanding of the task.
Structure
You structured your essay well, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs that each addressed a specific point, and a conclusion that summarised your arguments.
Language Use
You used a variety of language to discuss the topic, which helped to keep your writing engaging.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dread
  • passion
  • inherent talent
  • fufilling
  • career
  • job
  • fulfilled
  • unhappy
  • unsatisfied
  • work-life balance
  • burnout
  • stress
  • depression
  • anxiety
  • self-esteem
  • emotional well-being
  • potential
  • achieve
  • success
  • personal growth
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