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the plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year

#plans #show #site #airport #redevelopment #year
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the
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southwest
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Southwest
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airport
 looks
like
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now and year later how it would be after the renovation is completed.
Overall
, the
southwest
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Southwest Airport
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airport
 is extended and it
provide
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provides
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 more facilities to the people after the redevelopment. In
current
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the current
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 site, there
is
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are
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 no shops and facilities for the
passenger
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passengers
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 in the arrival
area
.
Departure
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The departure
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area
 is placed
in
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on
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 the left
side
 of the building and has a cafe too. Straight to the
departure
 and arrival
area
, there is
security
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a security
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 and customs passport control
area
 has been seen. Following that, there are 8 gates presented now,
two
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and two
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 walkways and check-in areas are
avaliable
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available
. After development, the
airport
 contains
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a totally
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totally
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total
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18
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of 18
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 gates
,
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 and a sky train inside the
airport
. The shops will be located
in
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on
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 the left
side
 of the
departure
 building. The
departure
 passengers will
access
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have access
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 to bag drop facilities. In the arrival
area
,the cafe,
ATM
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and ATM
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 are
also
 there for passengers. The car facility is
also
be
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included
in
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on
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 the right
side
 of the arrival
side
.
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Coherence & Cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, use a variety of linking words and ensure a logical flow of information throughout. Try to connect ideas more clearly between sentences and paragraphs.
Introduction & Conclusion
In your introduction and conclusion, aim for more precise and distinct statements that clearly summarize the main changes and developments. This helps in making your response more impactful.
Support for Main Points
Provide more specific examples to support your observations about the changes and enhancements at the airport. This will enrich your essay and make your points more convincing.
Task Response
You successfully provided an overview of the redevelopment of the airport and made comparisons between the current and future states.
Logical Structure
Your essay structure is logical, with a clear division between the current state and the projected changes.
Complete Response
You recognized key modifications and expansions, showing an effort to cover the task's requirements.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • terminal
  • car park
  • runways
  • redevelopment
  • proposed changes
  • expanded terminals
  • new gates
  • additional parking
  • amenities
  • navigation
  • environmental impact
  • economic impact
  • job creation
  • traffic congestion
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