The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities
The given map illustrates the images of the same island before and after the construction had been done for some tourist facilities. The first one shows the
bared
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land surrounded by the sea with only
few
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a few
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coconut trees and,The
beach
at the western
side
of the atoll. The second image represents the constructive island with a swimming
area
of
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the
beach
side
. There is a pier at the southern sea of the Isle ,and
also
the vehicle track starts from the pier and it runs around the
reception
hall and until the restaurant.
Reception
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The reception
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hall is situated middle of the land but more
to
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beach
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the beach
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side
. The restaurant is designed near
th
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the
Northern
sea
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area
. ASAP right to the
reception
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reception,
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there is a big accommodation
area
noticed circularly at the
central
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of the land.
Also
an
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another accommodation round
had
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created left to the
reception
and by the
side
of the
beach
.
Foot -path
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connected accommodation and go through the western
area
.
However
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the development of the tourist ait tried to protect the natural aspects
,
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because they did not harm at least one of
trees
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the trees
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or the seashore.
Submitted by amalitharangani0Most of villagers are changing their accommodations from villages to cities all around the world. As a result of this countryside residents are lower than town areas.I think this is a negative development and in this essay, I will elaborate my perspectives furthermore. According to this situation, my take on this is, different of the facilities between the town and the village. As an example, there are lots of shopping centres in the city such as house- hold items, clothes, stationeries, vehicles and so on. Conversely, developed educational centres, schools, hospitals with enough facilities are also at the urban areas. Nevertheless, there are lots of companies and unlimited job opportunities in the city area. Also, mostly there are continuous electricity, gas,water and well planned and punctual transport system as well. So people prefer to live in comfortably and moving to cities as they possible. Additionally, villagers and town people's have same basic need. Such as food, accommodation, education, good health and freedom as well. In some countries there is unavailable electricity in the countryside. Also, there is poor transport system, teachers and facilities at village schools. Moreover, sometimes not enough medications and human resources. So countryside people preferred to move to town. Finally, countryside population decreased and urbanisation in cities. In a nutshell, if there is as usual same facilities all over the city and rural areas,as there is lots of freedom in the countryside . My point of view is around the world this point is most prominent in developing countries. on

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words beach, side, area, reception with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • island
  • before and after
  • construction
  • tourist facilities
  • maps
  • changes
  • comparison
  • description
  • implications
  • personal opinion
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