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The chart below shows the tht amount of oill production by eight countries in 2014

The chart below shows the tht amount of oill production by eight countries in 2014
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visuall
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visual
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 illustrates the
persantage
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percentage
 of
oil
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production
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 in 8
countries
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 in 2014.
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 the biggest
amount
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 of
oil
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production
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 with once four was Russia followed by 22 per cent and the US by 20 per cent.
In
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overall
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 the other 5
countries
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was
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 25% in
this
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 pie chart. The four
countries
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 which experienced the biggest
amount
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 of
oil
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production
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, respectively were Russia by 25
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percent
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per cent
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, Saudi Arabia by 22
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percent
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per cent
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, The US by 20
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percent
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per cent
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 and China by 9
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percent
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per cent
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in one year when
is
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in
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 2014. The
litelest
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littlest
little
amount
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were
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 approximately once four
wich
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which
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 were Canada
by
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apply
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8
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percent
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per cent
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, Iran
by
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apply
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7
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percent
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per cent
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, Iraq
by
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5
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percent
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per cent
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 and the UAE
by
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4
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percent
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per cent
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 has produced
oil
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 in 2014.
In
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overall
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 just one
thirth
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third
 of
oil
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production
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 included 5
contries
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countries
 and the three
forth
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fourth
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 of the other
amount
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incuded
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included
includes
 3
countries
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, production, countries, amount, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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