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The graph below shows the annual visitor spend for visitors to New Zealand from 5 countries for the years 1996 - 2014

The graph below shows the annual visitor spend for visitors to New Zealand from 5 countries for the years 1996 - 2014
#visitor #visitors #zealand #countries #years
The line graph gives information about
a different countries
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different countries
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 from New Zealand's
visitors
during
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from 1996 to 2014 . On the whole, as can be
seen
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seen,
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 there were 5
countries's
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countries
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visitors
 did spend visiting New Zealand as Japan ,USA,UK,China and Australia ,
thus
 we notable there were alternatives . As a rule, the line graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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 that in China
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there were
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were
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 the least of percentage .
In other
words
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words,
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 the
number
 of
visitors
increase
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increased
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 gradually
in
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from
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 1998 to 2002 but
also
, it reached
the
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a
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 peak in 2004.
Furthermore
, in Japan
could
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the figure
of
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for
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visitors
were
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was
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 the highest
according
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from 1996 to 2014, in the same way the figure dropped in 2014 .
In addition
to
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, in
UK
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the UK
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 the
number
was
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a
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apply
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decrease
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firstly
 ,
then
 it achieved
peak
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a peak
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 in 2002 . In
Australia
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Australia,
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 the
number
 of
visitor
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visitors
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 was 2500 in 2004
besides
it
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plumage in 2014 and the
number
 of
visitor
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visitors
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 was 1000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual expenditure
  • tourism revenue
  • spending trends
  • economic impact
  • visitor spend
  • tourism sector
  • peak spending
  • fluctuations
  • incline/decline in spending
  • monetary contribution
  • tourist demographics
  • economic conditions
  • tourism campaigns
  • statistical analysis
  • data interpretation
  • fiscal year
  • extrapolate data
  • spending patterns
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