the pie graph below show the result of a survey of chlidern's activities . the first graph shows the cultural and lesiure activities that boys participate in , where the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate

the pie graph below show the result of a survey of chlidern's activities . the first graph shows the cultural and lesiure activities that boys participate in , where the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate
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The pie
chart
shows the differences between
boys
and
girls
their
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in their
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culture and leisure
activities
.
Overall
,
pies
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chart
were in the same level of percentage , as we compared
between
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girls
and
boys
,
boys
are the highest on computer games.
Likewise
,
girls
are the best
of
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at
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dancing . As can be seen more information in the pies
chart
, the first
chart
illustrates
boys
'
activities
there were prefer playing computer games
as
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at
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34% even though they playing basketball at 26% , In spite of
boys
did
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not
read
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reading
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any books , the percentage was 2% of reading . The second
chart
,
girls'
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is girls'
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cultural and leisure
activities
. They were more like dancing than reading . in the same way ,
girls
did a lot of
activities
unlike
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, unlike
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boys
!
To
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For
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more information ,
girls
were listening to music and netball at 10 or 15
percentages
Replace the word
per cent
show examples
.
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