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Band 4.5

The diagrams below give information about two road tunnels in two Australian cities.

The diagrams below give information about two road tunnels in two Australian cities.
The maps provide information about two different underground systems for cars in Australian cities.
Overall
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,
two
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the two
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 road tunnels differ more from each other, particularly
the
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in the
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 cost, size and length of construction. The
first
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tunnel
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 cost approximately half as much as the second
tunnel
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 to construct,
while
Linking Words
 the
first
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 road
tunnel
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 was smaller than
other
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the other
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. Moving to a detailed analysis, $555 million was paid
to
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for
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construction
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the construction
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 of the
first
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tunnel
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 and
was
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apply
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built
bridge
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a bridge
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 underneath a body of water and sand in 1986 and 1998 years.
However
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,
bridge
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a bridge
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 beneath a layer of stone and clay
constructed
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was constructed
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 after which was paid more than $1.1 billion. In terms of size, there was
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a deference
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deference
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difference
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among
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in
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 the size of the tunnels. The
first
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tunnel
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being
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is
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 1.5 meters high and 2.2 km long, and the second
tunnel
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being
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is
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 2.5 meters high and 3.6 km long.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words first, tunnel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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