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The chart below shows the results of a survey about peoples coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about peoples coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart illustrates the inquiry of people's choices in order to buy and drink tea and
coffee
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 in five cities in Australia in the
last
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 week. In general, what stands out from the graph is that the sum of individuals who went to a café to drink
coffee
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 and tea is more than buying
coffee
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 except for individuals who live in
Adelaide
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 and the percentage of buying fresh
coffee
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 is the lowest among them. as regards big metropolis,
such
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 as Melbourne and Sydney
as well as
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 Hobart which have the largest population, the amount of going to a café in order to drink
coffee
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 is
further
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 than other cities that are in order about 63, 62 and just over 60 per cent.
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, the total of individuals who have bought Insist
coffee
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 in Sydney is not quite as popular as in Melbourne,
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in Hobart, the sum of persons who buy Insist
coffee
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 is in second place. At
this
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 point, buying fresh
coffee
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 is the third priority of all folk in these towns which people have lived in Melbourne in comparison to Sydney, buying fresh
coffee
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 that was about just under 45 per cent.
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, the quantity of folk who buy fresh
coffee
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 and live in Hobart is approximately 37 per cent.
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, looking at Brisbane and
Adelaide
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, the total of communities who buy fresh
coffee
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 in Brisbane is not quite as popular as in
Adelaide
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 which was over one-third.
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, the amount of buying instant and fresh
coffee
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 in
Adelaide
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 is nowhere near as preferred as in Brisbane.
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