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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eating too much. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eating too much. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#show #percentages #meals #three #nutrients #summaries #information #features #comparisons
The pie charts illustrate the number of
type
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types
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 of nutrients from the meals namely
Sodium
, Saturated fat,
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and Added
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Sugar
.
Overall
, it can be seen that the biggest contributor
of
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to
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 unhealthy food was
dinner
, and the lowest contributor was
breakfast
. Looking at the
Sodium
 nutrient, the highest
contain
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contains
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of
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apply
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sodium
 from four meals was
dinner
,
it
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which
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 was around 43%,
and
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apply
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followed by Lunch was just under a
third,
and
then
,
breakfast
 and snacks
were
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had
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 same the percentage
around
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of around
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 14%. Moving to
the
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apply
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Saturated Fat,
the
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apply
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dinner
 still
the
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had the
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 biggest percentage
in
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of
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 saturated fat approximately 37%, and there was
significant
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a significant
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increased
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increase
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of
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in
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 saturated fat from snacks around 21%.
Besides
 that, the number of saturated fat
on
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in
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 lunch more lowest than
sodium
 was 26%, and
then
,
for
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apply
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breakfast
 still
contains
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contained
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lowest
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the lowest
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 saturated fat around 16%. Turning to
adding
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add
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sugar
, the biggest meal
contain
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containing
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sugar
 was snacks around 42%,
and
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apply
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followed by
dinner
aroud
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around
 23%, and
then
, lunch and
breakfast
contains
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contained
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lowest
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the lowest
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sugar
 around 19%, and 16% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, sugar, dinner, breakfast with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 6 times.
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