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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates data about a percentage of citizens consisting of older people between the ages of 65 and older, in the
period
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 starting from 1940 till 2040 in three different countries, USA, Sweden and
Japan
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. As
it
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apply
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can be observed, life expectancy in all three countries is going to be climbed in the future sharply, approximately after 2024.
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, there are a few main features that have to be demonstrated.
According to
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 the line, people of higher age groups in
Japan
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, the USA and Sweden were almost three times less in 1940 in comparison with the future
period
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 from 2030 to 2040, around 10 per cent of the
population
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.
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, as a matter of fact, the difference in the proportion might be noted in
Japan
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, where the decrease in the older
population
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 had been from 1960 to 2020, equal around 3 per cent.
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, the proportion of the older
population
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 in
Japan
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 and Sweden in the same
period
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 was approximately 15 per cent of the older
population
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.
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, in accordance with the written information, it is supposed that the Japanese generation improved their level of life and
consequently
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 increased their
period
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 of life.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, japan, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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