In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by fast food. This has a negative impact on families, individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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place
food
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is creating a negative effects
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a negative effect
negative effects
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opinion
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public
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delicious
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youngsters
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as well as
in adults too. To begin
with, junk
food
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popular
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do they
gives
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diffrent
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also
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provide
satisfaction
of hunger. They are in demand because of their attractive Add an article
the satisfaction
taste
and that taste
comes from harmfull
added preservatives. Correct your spelling
harmful
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colors
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dishes
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different
more
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apply
traditonal
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traditional
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.
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,
there is no doubt that Fast Remove the comma
apply
food
gives more sense of satisfaction rather than tradional
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traditional
food
, but it is creating a negative impact on every indivisuals
, in terms of various diseases. Correct your spelling
individual
individuals
For example
, junk
food
such
as pizza, burgger
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burger
burgers
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and chinese
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use
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the fact that,
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increases
becoming
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of becoming
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As a result
, many youngsters are hunting
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suffering
by
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from
the
obesity issues. Correct article usage
apply
In other words
, over cosuming
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consuming
food
increase
the chances of heart attack, cancer , Correct subject-verb agreement
increases
memory
loss types of diseases. Correct word choice
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sometimes
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difficult to overcome Correct article usage
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this situations
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these situations
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that
some people have Correct word choice
and
lossing
their life.
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losing
On the contrary
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home most of the time Change preposition
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tradtional
foods Correct your spelling
traditional
such
as roti, rice, diffrent
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different
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regularly and they are popular now as Correct your spelling
cook
safe
healthy and full Correct article usage
a safe
of
nutrition diet. fast Change preposition
apply
food
is becoming a favorable
choice for many kids, youngsters and adults as too because of Change the spelling
favourable
traditonal
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traditional
food
has over consuming they do not feel more
tastier than Change the word
apply
junk
food
as well as
it requires man power
and many ingredients, Correct your spelling
manpower
also
it is time consuming
, So Add a hyphen
time-consuming
that is
why many people now avoiding some conflicts and try out the fast way to devavouring
the hunger Correct your spelling
devouring
whith
delicious Correct your spelling
with
food
. Furthermore
, it is now available in
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at
fingertips
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the fingertips
many
mobile application provides the home Correct word choice
and many
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option Correct your spelling
delivery
as well as
affordable coupens
that Correct your spelling
coupons
gives
the many offers, so it is so easy the reach out the fast Correct subject-verb agreement
give
food
with in
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within
a minutes
.
In conclusion, Correct the article-noun agreement
minutes
a minute
while
traditional food
is healthy and full of nutrition diet, fast food
is providing
better Wrong verb form
provides
taste
and easy accessibility but it has many harmfull
effects and Correct your spelling
harmful
possibility
of addiction.Correct article usage
the possibility
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