In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by fast food. This has a negative impact on families, individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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food
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populer
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provide
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colors
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enhancer
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dishes
disease
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different
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apply
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traditional
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tradional
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traditional
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indivisuals
, in terms of various diseases. Correct your spelling
individual
individuals
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junk
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food
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burger
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suffering
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from
the
obesity issues. Correct article usage
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consuming
food
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increase
the chances of heart attack, cancer , Correct subject-verb agreement
increases
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due to
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that
some people have Correct word choice
and
lossing
their life.
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losing
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tradtional
foods Correct your spelling
traditional
such
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diffrent
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different
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cook
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healthy and full Correct article usage
a safe
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food
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favorable
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favourable
traditonal
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traditional
food
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more
tastier than Change the word
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food
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as well as
it requires Linking Words
man power
and many ingredients, Correct your spelling
manpower
also
it is Linking Words
time consuming
, So Add a hyphen
time-consuming
that is
why many people now avoiding some conflicts and try out the fast way to Linking Words
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devouring
whith
delicious Correct your spelling
with
food
. Use synonyms
Furthermore
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in
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at
fingertips
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the fingertips
many
mobile application provides the home Correct word choice
and many
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delivery
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affordable Linking Words
coupens
that Correct your spelling
coupons
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the many offers, so it is so easy the reach out the fast Correct subject-verb agreement
give
food
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with in
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within
a minutes
.
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minutes
a minute
while
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provides
taste
and easy accessibility but it has many Use synonyms
harmfull
effects and Correct your spelling
harmful
possibility
of addiction.Correct article usage
the possibility
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