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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.
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bar chart depicts the rate of illiteracy in some parts of the world in
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 year, categorised by gender.
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, it is obvious that
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 had
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 than
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 in all regions.
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, the highest figure was recorded in South Asia
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 both genders,
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 the opposite was true for developed countries. The proportion of women who can not read and write in South Asia was nearly 56%, followed by 52% in Arab States and 47% in Sub-Saharan Africa. These numbers for men were nearly 30% lower, with 34%, 29%, and 31% in turn. Turning to
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 remaining areas, it is noticeable that the female figure in East Asia and Oceania was nearly twice as much as that in Latin
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 and
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, with approximately 12% compared to 20%. These
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 were around 10% in the above regions.
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, developed countries had the lowest proportion of illiteracy rates in both genders, with 1% of
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 and 2% of
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