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The bar chart below shows estimated world olliteracy rates by region and gender for the last year

The bar chart below shows estimated world olliteracy rates by region and gender for the last year
#bar #world #olliteracy #rates #region #gender #year
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Demonstrated in the bar chart is information about the illiteracy percentage in the world
according to
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 region and gender in the previous year.
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,it can be seen that South Asia is the location had the highest number of citizens who do not have the ability to read and write ,
whereas
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 that for developed countries was the lowest .
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,
females
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 had a higher illiteracy rate than
males
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. Beginning with the three lower-standard countries.Both genders in developed nations can read and write with the number about 2% for men and 4% for women.
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 the figures for that of Latin American/Caribbean countries showed much higher.the number of men was approximately 10% and that of women was 13%.
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 ,the quota dramatically decreased to 7% for
males
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,
while
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 the amount for
females
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 rose to 7% in East Asia/Oceania. In the
last
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 year,the rest of the world showed high numbers in the majority.
To begin
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 with,it was about 30% for
males
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 and about 48% for
females
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 in Sub-Saharan Africa.
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 the percentage of men decreased
about
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by about
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 5%,the estimate of women decreased
over
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by over
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 50% in
Arab
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the Arab
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 States.Compared to Africa,South Asia had a significant increase in numbers,the
males
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was
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 roughly 32% and
females
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 were 55%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words females, males with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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