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The bar chart shows the average salaries for seven

cities

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in the UK:

London

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, Manchester, Glasgow, Bristol, Birmingham, Edinburgh and Cambridge.

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we can see that people in

London

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and the south earn much more than other people in the UK. As you may expect the average pay in the capital is

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more than in other

cities

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with more than thirty thousand

pound

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the average salary in

London

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. The next two

cities

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are

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in the south of England with Cambridge, which is in the South East like

London

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, is the

second,

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followed by Bristol. Next are the two

cities

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in Scotland, Edinburgh and Glasgow. Again, people in the capital city have higher

earning

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with Edinburgh nearly £1500 more than Glasgow. Salaries in Manchester and Birmingham are the lowest around

twenty five

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thousand.

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suggests that income will be very different and it will depend

according to

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your location.

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151 words

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The bar chart below shows average UK salaries, by city.

What is your opinion on the impact of artificial lighting on wildlife

We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits.

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