The bar chart below shows average UK salaries, by city.

The bar chart below shows average UK salaries, by city.
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The bar chart shows the average salaries for seven
cities
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in the UK:
London
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, Manchester, Glasgow, Bristol, Birmingham, Edinburgh and Cambridge.
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we can see that people in
London
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and the south earn much more than other people in the UK. As you may expect the average pay in the capital is
considerable
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considerably
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more than in other
cities
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with more than thirty thousand
pound
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is
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the average salary in
London
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. The next two
cities
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are
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in the south of England with Cambridge, which is in the South East like
London
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, is the
second,
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followed by Bristol. Next are the two
cities
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in Scotland, Edinburgh and Glasgow. Again, people in the capital city have higher
earning
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with Edinburgh nearly £1500 more than Glasgow. Salaries in Manchester and Birmingham are the lowest around
twenty five
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twenty-five
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thousand.
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suggests that income will be very different and it will depend
according to
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your location.

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