Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?
It is certainly true that
humans
activities Change the noun form
human
is
a major reason is damaging the ecosystem. Change the verb form
are
This
essay will discuss how humans
created environmental issues, and measures
can taken by authorities and Rephrase
how measures
people
to tackle this
problem.
To begin
with, The first humans
activity is Change the noun form
human
create
damage to Wrong verb form
creates
environment
is deforestation. Add an article
the environment
For example
, people
cutting forests in order make
food or furniture leads to Fix the infinitive
to make
decline
Correct article usage
a decline
the
number of trees. Change preposition
in the
This
is due to
the fact that,
forests Remove the comma
apply
plays
Change the verb form
play
significant
role Add an article
a significant
to absorb
Co2 footprint from the atmosphere Change preposition
in absorbing
,
because Remove the comma
apply
increase
Correct article usage
an increase
the
percentage of Co2 emissions Change preposition
in the
in
earth can Change preposition
on
leads
to Wrong verb form
lead
rising
temperature of Correct article usage
a rising
earth
. Add an article
the earth
Secondly
, Add an article
the industrial
industrial revolution
Correct your spelling
Industrial Revolution
also
leads to negative impacts of
the environment. To illustrate, Change preposition
on
the
factories and cars can release a considerable amount ofCorrect article usage
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
Co2
emissionsCorrect your spelling
CO2
,
because it is use fossil Remove the comma
apply
fuel
. Fix the agreement mistake
fuels
Therefore
, this
revolution is the main reason for climate change and
global warming and Correct word choice
apply
extinction
of animals.
Regarding solutions, Correct article usage
the extinction
the
lawmakers can introduce harsh laws to set limits for deforestation and pollution from vehicles Correct article usage
apply
as well as
factories. Also
they can launch educational Add a comma
Also,
campaign
in order to raise Fix the agreement mistake
campaigns
awarenss
among Correct your spelling
awareness
public
about Correct article usage
the public
environment
issues. At Replace the word
environmental
Correct article usage
the individuals
individuals
level, Change the noun form
individual
people
can use the
public transport Correct article usage
apply
instead
of use
their private cars in order to reduce Change the form of the verb
using
Co2
Correct your spelling
CO2
emission
. Fix the agreement mistake
emissions
Furthermore
, people
should reduce their consumption of goods and recycle as much as possible because the most of products result of
cutting down Change preposition
from
the
trees.
In conclusion, Correct article usage
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
humans
Fix the agreement mistake
human
activites
Correct your spelling
activities
effect
the ecosystem in a variety of forms namely, deforestationCorrect your spelling
affect
,
Correct word choice
and, industrial
industrial
revolution Correct article usage
the industrial
however
, there are many effective steps can take by the governments such
as, introudce
strict laws, raising awareness and Correct your spelling
introducing
also
people
should take responsbility
by using public transport, Correct your spelling
responsibility
reduce
their consumption of goods.Wrong verb form
reducing
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