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The table below shows the salaries of secondary/high school teachers in 2009. Describe the main features of the figure

The table below shows the salaries of secondary/high school teachers in 2009. Describe the main features of the figure
The table in question gives information about the salaries of
high
Correct word choice
higher
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 education teachers in the year 2009 .
Overall
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 , it is evident that in the
end
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end,
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 3 countries had a marked increase , the others showed a corresponding decline .
According to
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 the given data in the table , in both Australia and
denmark
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Denmark
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, they started in
less
Change the quantifier
fewer
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 numbers .
Then
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, they started to
rose
Wrong verb form
rise
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 after 15 years . Next , they remained steady . But Australia had more than Denmark in maximum salary . In reference to the vital in the figure ,
they
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there
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 was a sharp lept in the
last
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 third countries .
However
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 , the Japan it is the highest . Afterwards,
the
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apply
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korea
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Korea
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 is a second higher country . In the end , the lower
salary
Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
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 are ( in Luxembourg ,
Australia
Correct word choice
and Australia
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 ) respectively and the in
the
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apply
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last
Linking Words
 but least
is
Correct your spelling
in
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 Denmark .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual salaries
  • secondary/high school teachers
  • global differences
  • economic disparities
  • valuation
  • compensation
  • socio-economic status
  • investment in education
  • regional similarities
  • living costs
  • government funding
  • qualification requirements
  • demand for teachers
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