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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the
number
 of
people
 changes who went for international transportation in different years.
Overall
 it can be seen from the table that the
people
 who travel to Europe
is
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are
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 the most
famouse
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famous
 in every
periods
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period
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.
Additionally
, the
number
 of
people
 who travel to
Middle
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the Middle
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 East is the
leastest
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lowest
. The table
are
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is
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 shown in
millions
. It is apparent that
,
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apply
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Europe was the most popular place that
people
want
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wanted
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 to
went
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go
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, the
number
 of
people
iwas
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was
I was
incrased
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increased
 from 280.2 to 400.2
millions
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million
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 between 1990 and 2005.
Next,
Asia and the
pacific
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Pacific
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starting
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started
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 at 60.2
miliions
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million
millions
 in 1990 to 135.8
millions
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million
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 in 2005. And
then
 America starting at 80.5
miliions
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million
millions
 in 1990 to 113.2
millions
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million
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 in 2005
However
, Africa and
Middle
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the Middle
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 East
was
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were
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least
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the least
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 popular routes when
compare
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compared
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 with other
continental
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continents
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.
People
 who went to Africa and
Middle
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the Middle
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 East
starting
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started
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 at 18.2 and 9.8
millions
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million
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 in
year
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the year
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 1990 and there
was
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were
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 28.7 and 15.8
millions
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million
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people
 in 2005 respectively.
To conclude
 the total
number
 of
people
 who went to travel has trend to increase from 1990 to 2005 in every
routes
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route
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International travel
  • Million
  • Trend
  • Gradual rise
  • Significant jump
  • Technological advancements
  • Increased affluence
  • Globalization
  • Rate of increase
  • Low-cost airlines
  • Ease of travel
  • Tourism promotion
  • Regional differences
  • Cultural exchange
  • Economic impact
  • Environmental concerns
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