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The map below shows the changes that have taken palce at the waterfront area of a town calles Darwin between 2009 and 2014.

The map below shows the changes that have taken palce at the waterfront area of a town calles Darwin between 2009 and 2014.
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The diagrams detail how the waterfront
area
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 of Darwin town changed from 2009 to 2014. It is apparent that the most significant change is the addition of green spaces at the expense of the industrial zone,
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 most facilities in
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area
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 stayed the same over the years. In 2009, at the
center
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 of the waterfront, there were two industrial areas of different sizes separated by the footpath
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 and just 3 residential blocks located in the bigger industrial
area
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. By 2014, those industrial zones had disappeared completely. In the smaller
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area
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 a new swimming pool was added near the lake. In the larger
area
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, 3 new buildings and a university were constructed, and a number of green trees were planted.
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 the south-eastern coast of the town, a new
harbor
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 was built, which could be accessed from the main road through a new footpath running through the green
area
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. Regarding the remaining facilities, they experienced no change over the period. Along the road leading to the fishing
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 were the school and the convention, and it is of note that
this
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 fishing
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,
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 the two swimming pools nearby, remained unchanged.
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