The map below shows the changes that have taken palce at the waterfront area of a town calles Darwin between 2009 and 2014.

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The diagrams detail how the waterfront

area

of Darwin town changed from 2009 to 2014. It is apparent that the most significant change is the addition of green spaces at the expense of the industrial zone,

whereas

most facilities in

this

area

stayed the same over the years. In 2009, at the

center

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of the waterfront, there were two industrial areas of different sizes separated by the footpath

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and just 3 residential blocks located in the bigger industrial

area

. By 2014, those industrial zones had disappeared completely. In the smaller

area

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a new swimming pool was added near the lake. In the larger

area

, 3 new buildings and a university were constructed, and a number of green trees were planted.

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the south-eastern coast of the town, a new

harbor

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was built, which could be accessed from the main road through a new footpath running through the green

area

. Regarding the remaining facilities, they experienced no change over the period. Along the road leading to the fishing

area

were the school and the convention, and it is of note that

this

fishing

area

together with

the two swimming pools nearby, remained unchanged.

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The map below shows the changes that have taken palce at the waterfront area of a town calles Darwin between 2009 and 2014.

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In some cities although more and more people use public transport the roads are still crowded. How can this problem solved? provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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In some cities of the world, cars are replacing bicycles. However, in some cities, bicycle are replacing cars. What are the reason for this for these developments? In your opinion, which one is better?

Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that the Government should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or a shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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