Rich countries often offer money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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problem
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the help that rich
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countries
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. The
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development
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countries
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support
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the poor
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countries
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explained
. There are so many ways to
support
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this poor country
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from poverty. The citizens of these
countries
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college
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of people who can
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these
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country
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name
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worldwide. Learn theme who to make
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own economy and
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it up. Second for
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charitty which
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take
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the people who
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theme
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to these
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. So, when
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reach there they can
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themselves by
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bullding
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building
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the way they
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in
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a lot of
countries
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as (bait
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zakah
) and (alrahmah)
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located in
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this
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both
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organisations
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allready mintioned
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already mentioned
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food, water ,clothes and
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finances
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that's
that
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support
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these
countries
. In conclusion, the
proplem
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problem
of the poor
countreis
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countries
can be solved not only
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financial
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a financial
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way. From my point
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view
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alot
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a lot
of people must have information about how to
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support
these poor
countries
and why they need to help them
?.
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I
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don't
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them money
i
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think the
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many other
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directions
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mentioned
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Introduction
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Examples
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Non-financial aid
  • Root causes
  • Sustainable development
  • Dependency
  • Empower
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Technology transfer
  • Education programs
  • Infrastructure development
  • Healthcare support
  • Skill-building
  • Knowledge transfer
  • Food security
  • Recipient countries
  • Misalignment
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