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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart gives information about the number of
attendence
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attendance
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occurred
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 those two years.
Overall
, the statistics show that not only the
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percentage
 of visitors was
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increased
incresead
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increased
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also
 the rate of delighted
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feedbacks
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had
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significant growth. By way of comparison , new refurbishment is reported to woo people to pay
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 landmark visits. The table clearly shows the difference in
population
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the population
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increased from 74000 to 92000
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the
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 year later.
In addition
, the percentages of satisfaction levels were vary due on account of
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 changes. With regard to
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 with the very satisfied point of view, there was a five-unit raise during those years.
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, satisfied spectators had a growth in
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popularity
 as well.
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