The pie charts below give information about the population of South Korea in 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below give information about the population of South Korea in 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pie
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graphs
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give us information related to
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in Korea. One is the proportion of
population
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the population
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in 2000 and the other is about the prediction of
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the population
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in 2050. One noticeable thing is that a
group
of people aged between 40 and 59 accounted for almost
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half in 2000, with a figure of 42%.
This
was followed by an
age
group
between 20 and 39(33%).
Therefore
, these two groups
totaled
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65%. Meanwhile, the youngest
age
group
(under 20) represented 15% and the oldest
group
(
age
over 60) had the lowest percentage of
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the population
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. It is easy to gather that adults (
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ages
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between 20 and 39) and the next
age
category(
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ages
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between 40 and 59) will show
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increasing amount of percentage of
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the population
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(74%) in 2050, even though a figure
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young
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the young
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adults
group
will decrease slightly to 29%.
In contrast
, the data clearly shows that adolescents will decline dramatically to 7%
while
the oldest
group
almost will double (19%) during the same time period.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the economically active
population
(
age
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ages
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between 20 and 59) will continuously demonstrate
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a notable
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amount of
population
in 2050.
However
, there will be
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the striking
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difference in
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the percentage
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of the youngest and the oldest
age
group
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groups
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in 2050 compared to
in
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2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, group, age with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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